Aug 03, 2021
Wow so many long comments here, but I agree with Bus-kun. I think the reason why I'm so excited with every new chapter for your novel is the direction of your plot. The problem I feel with most of the other writers is that they start off strong, but then later chapters kinda falloff and the characters do things without purpose. Every single little detail you showed us so far, from the mention of Remus in chap 5 or 6 (can't remember exactly) to things like Evan's necklace pays off very clearly and you know how to develop these things. Your world building never feels like exposition and happens very naturally. I understand why you only introduce the nations in the past few chapters, because mentioning them isn't really relevant at the early chapters where the focus is mainly Evan and Sereya. Imo, it makes sense to only tell us about the world now, since I'm guessing the 7 heroes summit is gonna take place after this where only then it's relevant. Also, Sereya and now Eveline are complete badasses imo, keep up the good work.