Chapter 1:
Blades of the Shattered Chaplets
I'm sorry. I'm sorry. I'm sorry. I'm sorry. I'm sorry. I apologize if this story is not interesting enough. I never intended to post this, nor did I ever think it would gain any attention. If it does, then great. If it does not, then that is okay as well. I had many ideas flood my mind and decided to write them on paper and turn them into a story. I am not a writer, nor do I know how to write really. There are probably a lot of mispronunciations as you read this and holes in the story. Please forgive me for this and try to enjoy the story to the best of your ability. I realize that some parts are boring. I found some of it even boring after rereading it, but it was very hard for me to erase all of that and restart. I would read it over and over again and try to fix it, but I simply could not and changed my mind to favor these sections and mark them as "Character Development." If you want to, please skip over any boring parts, but please at least continue reading. There are many twists that I thought of as I wrote, and it was hard for me to keep track of all these different things, objects, characters, places, monsters, and everything in between. I had a separate document open when rereading to list every single character appearance, weapon they had, Chaplets they had, mindset, and anything else I needed. Although I did this, it was still very hard for me to keep track, which is why this story took me a long time to write. Like I said, I have many ideas and trying to form them into a story line was very difficult. When I read through it myself, I understand it, but that is because I wrote it. I know where the twists are going to take place and who is involved, but I struggled with the emotional aspect from the characters in portraying how they felt when people they thought they knew were not really who they thought they were, or events unfolded that they did not believe could happen. I still do not think this story is perfect by any means, and anyone out there that believes that they can rewrite it in a different way, please go ahead and do so. If you'd like to mention my name "Upriser" then that would be greatly appreciated. The story is based off swordsmanship and the idea of "Chaplets," which I came up with as small orbs that contain different powers. There are 70 of them total and are a main part of the story. I try to describe them to the best of my ability and what they do, but please understand that it may not be perfect. I wish I used certain Chaplets more throughout the story, but it felt pointless in some situations when some of the Chaplets are so useless. I think that it where I struggled with character development and world building. I always seemed to gravitate towards games and fighting because it is interesting, but many times, I would get stuck with 2 people fighting that were unbelievably strong, so I never knew who to have win. I feel like I could've done this better, but I just don't know and the fighting may seem one sided, but I promise that was not my intention. I tried to also revisit places in this story, but I focused so much on the characters moving forward to different places and having different experiences, that I didn't really go back to certain places that I described in the story, so there often is not much time spent in one place as these characters go. The story is based off change and questions, "Can people change?" That is the whole point, so as you read, you will see characters emotions waver the entire time. Their personalities constantly change and a big part of this was also how I felt in the day and time that I was writing for that character, so if the consistency seems a little off, then I am sorry as well. I'm sorry if I don't portray something to your liking. Everyone always likes different things, so it is hard to please everyone. I also structured the story with the names of the people before the dialogue because it helped me as I wrote. There were too many people I added that had conversations back and forth, so I feel like I had to do this. I also am not a good drawer, so my original goal was to draw a manga with this idea, as I think it is very good in a manga format. However, I am not good enough to please people's eyes in that aspect. If someone would like to draw panels from this light novel, then be my guest and please share them with me. I took a lot of imagery from photos online, but I realize people are very against that idea, but it is all I had that was available. I will not post them on here, but if people would like to gain an understanding of what the scenery, characters, swords, and Chaplets I pictured look like, then I can definitely change that mentality. There is a lot more I would like to say, but I think you understand where I am coming from. Please try to enjoy the story as best as possible. I have a lot more to post in the future, and if there is any feedback you would like to leave in the comments, please do.
Thank you!
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