When Isaac arrives in Bluefalls City after winning a lottery to attend Lake Heights Academy, it seems like nothing more than a fresh start—a quiet move to a new place, a new school, and a new routine.
To settle in, Isaac joins the Photography Club, where he meets its charismatic leader, Andra P. Jay. She’s sharp, eccentric, and drawn to the unseen—urban myths, and the hidden life. During one late meeting, Andra shares a chilling rumor: a monster said to stalk the city’s abandoned subway, the same one the Bluefall Restoration Service (BFRS) closed after a string of unexplained disappearances.
Intrigued—and perhaps a little reckless—Andra persuades Isaac to help her investigate. She finds a concealed access tunnel she’s kept hidden, a forgotten route leading straight into the old subway system. At midnight, beneath the quiet hum of rain, they slip out of the dorms and disappear into the dark.
Unbeknownst to them, this marks the first tremors of something that should not exist.
I've never published anything. I've mainly been world building in the background. All this to say, I'm a bit new to writing so any feedback on my chapter would be nice. At the end of the day I'm going to write it the way I want it. But that doesn't mean I can't improve flow and clarity. I'm not the best of the best, I'm just trying to create something fun for everyone.
I've never published anything. I've mainly been world building in the background. All this to say, I'm a bit new to writing so any feedback on my chapter would be nice. At the end of the day I'm going to write it the way I want it. But that doesn't mean I can't impro...