Oct 18, 2023
This story is a mood and I love it. I am simply a sucker for emotional gut punches. And your story delivers those splendidly.
The ending was definitely the highlight for me (and god, I realized that is a horrible, horrible pun as I finished typing out the sentence).
One thing, right in the first paragraph you repeated 'things that things that' and it really broke me out of my immersion into your otherwise nice intro...
But the mood caught me back a few sentences later, and like I said, love the mood!