Jul 28, 2022
To:Tomoyuki
Hey!! Thank you so much for all your feed back and sorry for a late reply. I was reading through everything you said to really take in your feedback. To be completely honest with you, I wrote this story when I was a lot younger on another site before taking it down but after going back to it recently, I wanted to know if I made a mistake dropping this story a long time ago. I agree with you the tense could use some work, also you made me realize I forgot to put in the point of view on this introduction because I literally said in my head this needs a point of view placed into it. So for that I apologize. I find it funny though because I honestly feel this is the worst chapter of the book but it's also the introduction of the book. I will definitely be going back and making changes. Thank you so much again for this, it really helps make my story and writing better. 💯