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Just a man that likes to write for the heck of it, if you have any insight or ideas for the stories I write by all means please do suggest them, I'm happy to hear everyone's point of view
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Aug 19, 2023
To:Erii
thank you for the feedback, I'll be sure to review it when I get the chance
Aug 14, 2023
To:Werecat
why not, I'll take a look
Honestly so far it was a treat to read, pretty good
Aug 10, 2023
it felt nice and sweet, although a bit more background information for the characters feels like it would of been nice for me to connect to, this is a good intro though, kinda reminds me of nisekoi now that im writing about it
the story has good premise but it feels like it zips through, like you talk about one thing and just skip to another, and then the grammar might need some editing, for me reading it out load tends to help if it sounds good, also some background information for Kaito might help, that way I can connect to him
The story is not bad but it feels like there is no ground work, like it was just randomly written with no background information given, also the commentary feels a bit unusual, I recommend reading it out and seeing if it still sounds good, if not then probably needs some work, its good but chunky
Aug 06, 2023
To:Hina
thank you so much, I read your's as well its marvelous