Nov 08, 2023
I really enjoyed the motif of the razor blade. It was a very playful and clever way of using it. The use of references to the philosophers is also very interesting. Though I have not studied them I still enjoyed their inclusion as it really adds to the sense that the protagonist feels as if he understands life in a way no one else does. One small criticism is the present tense sometimes being switched to past tense and some sentences, in the beginning, being a bit confusing. Although writing in the present tense tends to be much more structurally complex as well as sentence structure. You have still done a great job in the crafting of your piece I really enjoyed it.