Dec 06, 2023
To:Anime07
Thanks for the critique. Sorry, I didn't get back to fixing it sooner since I was sick and finals are taking up most of my time in this last-minute made dash.
The reason that I was telling in the beginning more than tell is that I was told that I was being too descriptive to the point that it was distracting from the flow of the story and pulled the reader out of the story, so I shortened it to move it along faster. If you have more questions let me know.