Jan 24, 2025
To:lolitroy
Hello again lolitroy!
I’m so glad you’re still reading c:
I appreciate your feedback, and I’m truly sorry about the punctuation errors. Even though I tried to keep them at a minimum, English isn’t my first language so I might have missed a few rules. Punctuation works differently in my native language, so it becomes tricky for me to notice these issues. I didn’t get any beta readers either. I’d really like to fix them now that you’ve pointed them out, but doing so will surely get me disqualified :(
I just hope they don’t become too distracting for you, or any other readers.
Regarding the dialogue, I think saying it’s too straight forward is a fair observation. However, I can at least assure you it’s not due to a lack of trust in the reader. It has a lot more to do with the characters and my preferences as an author when writing them.
At least for Aelia and Fennel, I prefer them to have them state their emotions and ideas clearly - even if it comes across as a bit childish – rather than having them hide their intentions or their feelings, as characters with other personalities might do.
(By the way, I hope I’m explaining myself correctly: I don’t think my dialogues are perfect at all! I’m sure I still have a lot to learn. I just wanted to clarify that if they’re too straightforward, it’s probably because I genuinely love open communication and wrote these two characters with that in mind, not because I don’t trust the reader.)
To conclude: I’m not sure if future dialogues will suit your taste, and you’ll probably come across more of the same kind of punctuation errors, for the reasons I explained earlier. But even so, I truly believe there are things that make this novel worth reading :)
Thanks once again for giving The Guardian of Rossmaria a chance!!
