Dec 28, 2024
To:lolitroy
Yeah, that's all fair feedback, thank you. I've definitely had a bit of tunnel vision in writing around Lena, so I agree that the other characters don't feel fleshed out enough. Your first part of the paragraph is definitely accurate to the vibe I'm going for, but I guess I really need to evolve past that to actually have the story be interesting and keep people engaged! Thanks so much for all the good points, hopefully I'll be able to incorporate them in some future chapters and make this story better :)
