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Oct 02, 2025

To:Fantos Pinto

Talking doesn't always help, and Jerome simply skipped the nine cutscene.

Silver Sky - Let me rewrite your story

Chapter:9

Oct 02, 2025

To:Goh Hayah

I actually know the feeling. Back then, I wrote a lot for the theater. It's always a bit unusual, but in this case I don't feel it.
It just feels fluid.
And that's good.

The Death on Green (and the cat who always lands on foot)

Chapter:1

Oct 02, 2025

To:Karian / KomakiP

She keeps fighting

Silver Sky - Let me rewrite your story

Chapter:4

Oct 02, 2025

To:Earlo_18

You are the author of gun hero, first of all I apologize for not knowing the guns they fired.

Hanla is a stubborn character, she will surely cause more heroics and chaos.

Silver Sky - Let me rewrite your story

Chapter:0

Oct 02, 2025

I'm a fan of well-written natural dialog.

You actually play good with the subject "death" I want to read more.

Their dynamics in particular are perfect.

Also that he complains less about being dead than that it's cold and he might catch a cold.

And let's be honest, it's a very high-quality, pleasant read.

Yes, and that she doesn't feel these simple things like the cold or the taste itself. Interesting structure.

The Death on Green (and the cat who always lands on foot)

Chapter:1

Oct 01, 2025

An isekai about airplanes and or flying objects because griffins are also there and his co-pilot is simply called Anemone or also called Wind Flower in my country at least.

Let's see what kind of dynamic develops.

Crashing Into You: My Co-Pilot is a Princess

Chapter:1

Sep 30, 2025

I have no idea about planes. But somehow I notice the enthusiasm and it was written quite vividly. Haruki is quite likeable so far and also very extreme with his view. "Japan will become a Konbini vendo nation" (
You don't hear that every day and I've never read a line like that in my life.)

I'm excited so far.

Crashing Into You: My Co-Pilot is a Princess

Chapter:0

Sep 30, 2025

To:Karian / KomakiP

I wanted to get away from the typical isekai. That's why she questions a lot of things.
What was important to her was the focus and the liveliness of the world. It shouldn't be a playground for her. Thank you again

Silver Sky - Let me rewrite your story

Chapter:1

Sep 29, 2025

So ironically, it kind of makes sense that most people would see Gun as some kind of snack if there was something like Chewing Gums in the world.

Honestly the dialog and the obsessions of the casts make this really fun to read.

One gun head and one fierce brocon.

Reincarnated as the Gun Hero in Another World Volume 1

Chapter:4

Sep 29, 2025

To:Karian / KomakiP

Thank you, I rarely see comments.

Hanla is a character where I sat a bit longer and the beginning was changed a lot. Her empathy and iron will should shine through well, that was my goal also in the future chapters. :)

Silver Sky - Let me rewrite your story

Chapter:0

Sep 27, 2025

Hello,

First of all, it's great that you're publishing something.

Really, and it can work, but I would recommend letting the plot unfold and removing the repetitions.

For example: You often describe the room in which the protagonist stands up and twice that he opens his eyes.

I can see that you have a plan for the story you want to tell, but unfortunately you're taking some of the fun away from me.
You explain a lot, but little of what is explained actually happens.
You could incorporate some of the relationships more naturally. You don't need to explain them separately in a text box.

I also miss seeing what the characters look like. I know that Tsuki has dark blue hair.

Your dialogue is good, it feels lively. It makes me want to keep reading.

Nevertheless, keep up the work and I look forward to reading more.

Your Holundria.

Storybook: The Making of A King

Chapter:0

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