Aug 01, 2025
Wow! Where do I even begin? It’s such a beautiful story. I was immersed in this new Fae world from the very beginning, and I love the fact that she already knows she’s been Isekaied once she’s born so we don’t have to waste time with the MC wondering what happened. I also like the way you seemlessly transition to the backstory of her life before. It’s a life we can all relate to, losing our sleep and mental wellbeing just to play games!
Anyway I love it. Maybe there are just small edits you can do, like break up paragraphs more for the sake of flow. And maybe give a brief description of what the mc looks like, we just know she looks like a child but what about her hair? What color is she etc
But yeah this is a great book overall. If you fine tune this and keep us this talent in story telling, I honestly think you have a shot at winning this contest!
