Sep 06, 2025
I think I am missing some juicy details here. I want to be sympathetic to the protagonist, but I can't quite anchor there. You know? Show, don't tell. I think you should expand this chapter into several scenes showing what other people do to Li instead of telling me these vague descriptions. This way, there can be more vivid details and sweet, sweet drama. I haven't read the rest of your story, so this may be your actual intention.
