Jul 30, 2026
To:Bubbles
I appreciate the like and the criticism/advice. To be perfectly honest, I'm not entirely sure what you mean though; after rereading this chapter, what you're talking about only really happens in one paragraph, the one where the Dungeon Complex is explained. I definitely get that it's clunky, but I wanted the reader to know right away what the place was while still opening with a chapter that wasn't right when Chloe traveled inside of it. Otherwise I feel like the descriptions of how things look don't necessarily put a pause on anything because they're just as simple as the rest of the story and dialogue. But I will remember this in the future and look out for it as I write. Thank you again for reading.
