Oct 02, 2017
Honestly, your writing is steadily improving with each chapter. Not just the aesthetics of it, but more so the flow and understanding how a scene should progress as to not feel tedious for the reader. I was completely glued to the words on screen throughout this, leaving me a tiny bit proud having since your drafts from years ago.
The characters are really starting to grow on me. Namely Taichi, which is starting to seem far more likeable than when first introduced -- and of course Yumeha, cause she's frekin' KANPEKI (and best girl)!
The whole idea that your story links to a real place (as beautiful as Kawazu and Shimoda) really shows the amount of thought you've put into a simple story like this, and that just makes everything this much cooler.
I'm going to go with commenting rather shit-talking on IM from now on, so get working on the next one. >:)
(You'll take me to Shimoda, right? You wouldn't lie to me, would you?)
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