TokyoFox250 - "Some Moments in Tokyo's Life"

Okay before we begin I would like to say something, I might have been too harsh in the pervious roast but for that one the points still stand, but I will go into this with a free look and will not mention the issues if they are the same as the previous work.

Now that, that is out of the way lets get into it!!!!

Parody Summary:

I wanna tell some hallucinations in Tokyo's life.

They are about, cucking, NTRing, chronic depression, virginity and beta behaviour.....

(Yes real? Well maybe not because I am ultra loser?)

Chap 1

Okay the mc in high school has a crush on Amane, where she goes on a 3 paragrafh ramble about how beautiful she is, like a tier 3 sub on twitch giving 5000$ to their favourate e-girl in the hope their sad virgin asses could get some nuds lmao. Mei is her rival and is making sure to coochie block her to get some taste of that juicy sht for herself. MC is too beta to do anything about it and is on that copium with extra tears.

Bruh it was sport fest and Amane suddenly didn't feel well and now she wants to MC to go with her this time, yooo Amane is low key a pimp, getting all that coochie from her bitches. MC is nothing more then a down bad simp awaiting to get used lmao. I think touching grass will be a great option for MC. EW HANDHOLDING IN THE NURSE OFFICE HOW LEWD IMPOSSIBLE!!!!!! Damn straight kissed the mc Amane is best pimp around the block.

chap 2

Damn its the my ohhhhhhhhh mahhhhh gawddddd u aruuuuuuu mah lovu at firstoooo sightoooooooooo!!! This is centered around clubs and mega pimp Amane wanted to join one, as beta cuck mc was in the guitar club and irrelivant side bitch Mei was in the art club even tho her art was worse then a 5 year old, but I guess its her way to cope her non important existence. Amane was interested in in the music club, but Mei titties were just a bit more inviting to her, so she went her way to get some that in the art club like the superficial trash she is lmao. Ight MC yeet her way out her club ativitties in order to see a bedridden Amane again, like how can you get bitches just by doing nothing in bed, she is on a whole other level man. Getting her toes sucked by woman without any effort XD.

(The fact that the name of the mc is Tokyo seems like a self insert so its making me cringe :skull: so that is why I keep calling her mc lmao)

Bro BRO BRO THIS IS GOLDEN AMANE PULLED A GET IN MY BED HOE MOVE, SWEET YURI SMEX CONFIRMED!!!! 10/10!!!!

AND DONE!!!!!

Author tried to self insert herself into a cringe love stories since her love life is non existent, like even a cringe shoujo written by a 6 year old is better than this trash would ever be smh.

Mid/10 would rather buy monkey NFT than read this again!

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OKAY LET ME TELL YOU SOMETHING........

YOU DID....

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BETTER THAN BEFORE!!!

let me explain, the style is not that different but it being short chapter and told from a more 1st person perfective I actually could tell what was going on ALL THE TIME!! the rapid fire dialogue is still there but with the amount of inner monologue makes it that it doesn't bother me as much. I think that this book is a step to the right direction, but I advice that you should work on dialogue and refine it a little bit to give it a more natural feel.

So yes I am positive lol XD.

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P.S.S: (Welp my self roast is next rip my non existent reputation)

Now see ya at the next reactionary/roast chapter!

Author Link: https://www.honeyfeed.fm/u/6263 (yes it counts if you post a new book but does not show when I do I continuation of a already roasted book of same author)