Individuality and sentiment are two things that distinguish one person from the next. However, trouble and difficulty lie down the path of adversity for those decreed as a whole but born destinate to be two halves — Twins.
Meet Rei Hirojima and Kei Hirojima — two normal inseparable young boys closely connected through their admiration for one another. Brought up in Japan's countryside by their parents who have no other family, Kei has a closer connection to his mother whilst Rei to his father.
Crime is on the rise. But on one fateful day, they lose their parents and home at the hands of a gang, seeking to steal all the wealthy possessions of the Hirojima family. This is a true test of nature against nurture as the boys walk down different paths, voracious in inflicting revenge against the assailants who took everything away from them; One enacting justice embodying the gavel, the other defiant of the law culling with his justice: his fists.
Prompt: When the Clock Strikes Midnight
Theme(s): #Mystery #Crime #Suspense
My themes: #Police #Shounen/Seinen
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Why X = Y? Men have a pair of chromosomes labelled XY. As the story revolves around male twins, they are the same — they are equivalent to each other in terms of the DNA they share — yet they are two completely different people who gradually develop their personality, and through it, they gain individuality.
Feel free to scrutinise and critique. I'll take it to heart, and it'll rip a whole but that's fine. :]
The first 19 chapters up to the end of "Chapter 19: Regret is Loss Irreplaceable" can be seen as the prologue. I wanted to do a time skip initially, but I also wanted it to feel full in a sense, so I wrote it out.
Chapters 1-19 focus primarily on two themes: Psychological and Martial Arts. Chapters after that focus more on Psychological, Police and Crime. Both parts have elements of Action and Mystery, more so in the latter half.
Prompt: When the Clock Strikes Midnight
Theme(s): #Mystery #Crime #Suspense
My themes: #Police #Shounen/Seinen
PLEASE LIKE AND COMMENT! : )
Why X = Y? Men have a pair of chromosomes labelled XY. As the story revolves around male twins, they are the same — they ...
Congrats on making it into the semi-finals! That afterword needs some edits XD
Thanks for the read : ]
I planned for it to be way longer, but then I would probably have exceeded the 190,000-word limit so I had to end it soon, which is why the ending may feel 'weak' or 'abrupt'. Give some feedback and criticism when you're done please : ]]]
Again, thanks for reading.
Both long and a heck of a lot of chapters.. I estimate the first chapter alone to be ~5,000 words. I place your novel in my library, add a few provisional reacts and take note to start reading after the contest ends and/or when I take a reading breather :)
The relationship between the twins breaks my heart, see them like this now due to what happened...
I agree with the previous comment, your prose is very good. I'm not a huge fan of Martial Arts stories but let's see how it goes down the road.
This start really went off with a huge bang, I wonder how things will develop.
i want moreeee >:C
Thank you! Your kind words truly do make a difference when I read them. I hope you enjoy the rest of the novel : ]
The prose is *chef's kiss*
( It took a while to figure out the shortest way to comment my thoughts, LOL)
That description of the school reminded me of my childhood back in Italy. The school looked exactly the same 😀
Thanks! Your kind words mean a lot to me. Don't take what you can do for granted.
Sorry, I'm kind of in a 'state' right now, if that means anything. : ]
Just, thank you for taking the time to read. It truly does mean a lot.
This is a really good first chapter. Parts of it remind me of Erased.
I like how Rei and Kei casually return home one night to meet a sight that forces them to grow up. They saw their parents' killers, but they have no idea who the killers actually are, and all they can do is watch as their parent's killers flee the scene of the crime.
I like how everything was set up, all the hints that were given. Rei and Kei's differences were brought to light early on in the chapter, so when they choose different paths after their world is turned upside down. It just...it just fits. Nature against nurture is definitely what came to mind.
Also, the news report at the beginning was well-written. It totally grabbed my attention.
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Thanks! I can't edit it now because I'm in the Semi-Finals, but I will do it after the competition is over. The afterword definitely does need some edits, seeing as I wrote it last minute after writing the final chapter!