I'm just a writer/reader who's got stories to tell and time to kill.
My favorite genres include; Comedy, fantasy, magic, action, adventure and the occasional isekai(and probably some more that I can't remember).
Oct 13, 2023
Well, that was pretty damn grim.
Keep it up, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Sep 22, 2023
It doesn't even have a real ending right now. I left it here so anyone willing to give me advice on the rewrite could do so before I get started on it (Whenever that may be).
Basically, unless you're specifically looking to help a newbie writer out, it's probably in your best interests to read another book, as much as it pains me to say/type.
Thank you for your time, apologies if I disappointed.
Aug 22, 2023
Sorry about the incredibly late release, needless to say, I've been busy. Hopefully I have enough free time to get back to schedule but I make no promises.
Thanks for reading.
Aug 13, 2023
Candlemaker definitely has a Brothers Grim style creepy sound to it.
I would've read earlier but I've been occupied as of late and only recently got a little free time.
Keep it up.
Jul 24, 2023
There's a few typos in the first and third to last paragraph.
But I still enjoyed the chapter itself. It's reminiscent of the comedic cross-dressing episodes you'd find in some animes, but taken to an extreme degree.
Keep it up.
Jul 23, 2023
I'd recommend giving this chapter another scan.
I believe I spotted a few minor typos such as;
"...Removing his hands from his face and starting her hunt..."
When referring to Emma in the game of hide and seek.
"...She saw my standing beside my desk..."
Referring to the desk scene with Iva and Mary.
Regardless your writing style is impressive as always and has successfully enticed me to further read your novel.
Jul 08, 2023
There is a paragraph I believe referring to Alan Fergus' mother where she is referred to as Mrs. Aubrey.
I think it went something like;
"Oh, Mrs. Aubery... you don't need to apologize. Just make sure he learns from this and doesn't repeat such actions."
Did I miss something perhaps?
Anyways, good chapter, as always I am in awe of the fluidity of your writing style, even if I'm not a big fan of the genre as a whole.
Jun 28, 2023
It's very impressive to me how well you are able to paint such a clear scene with your words, yet leave the perfect amount of vagueness for imaginative readers to fill in the gaps with their own interpretations.
I feel like you have already graduated a skill level many authors struggle to.
Or maybe that's just me.
Jun 28, 2023
I have to admit, I typically read comedy or more light-hearted books so this genre is pretty new to me. Therefore I'm probably not a good judge.
That being said, I can appreciate your writing style. It feels really smooth and refined. Especially with Mr. Aubert and his wise old man/philosopher persona.
I am definitely intrigued and look forward to reading your story.
Jun 26, 2023
To:Syed Al Wasee
Thanks for commenting and liking. I have to admit it was quite a shock to see that many notifications in one day. I was happily surprised and I will be sure to check out your featured novel when I have the time.
As for your advice, I feel as though it would be a lot easier to slowly introduce the concepts like that in an isekai, or if the mc was an outsider to wherever the story takes place.
But in Draconum Familia the mc(s) were raised in The Orochi Isles and so I figured it would make more sense for them to be a little more knowledgeable and therefore they really aren't learning anything new when it comes to things like magic or history.
You know what I mean?
Anyways, thank you for taking the time to read, like, and leave a comment on my novel. Your advice is appreciated and I look forward to hearing anymore you are willing to give.
Jun 22, 2023
Nice work! Must admit I didn't really expect that.
By the way, I think I noticed a typo.
"...The machine guy probably forgot the instructors for her..."
Did you mean 'Instructions'?
Jun 17, 2023
Sorry for the late release I hit a bit of a writer's block. Here's hoping I can return to my planned schedule.
Jun 06, 2023
Thanks for another good chapter, keep it up.
Also, If you've got the time I'd appreciate if you gave my new book 'Draconum Familia' a read and tell me your thoughts in the comments.
May 29, 2023
I never watched Yu-Gi-Oh so I'm sure a lot of this chapter went over my head.
But good work nonetheless.