Sep 15, 2022
To:Swig
This is great feedback, I don’t see this as overcritical at all- the Seth’s name stuff truly is a mistake on my part. Oh, and the reason Roscoe doesn’t think too much about what Cleo will look like before he comes to her door is because back in chapter one he actually sees her before she enters it, the morning she moves in. So as soon as he knows his neighbor’s Sumire Anata, he can put two and two together. I guess he could’ve worried about her personality more, but Roscoe, regardless of how right he was, thought he had a good understanding of what kind of person Anata was behind the screen, so he wasn’t really focused on that. I’ll read that second chapter of yours, by the way, the first got me pretty interested. Thanks again, this stuff’s helpful to hear!
