Jun 02, 2025
SO THEY ACTUALLY ATTTTTTEEE THE STARRYYY MUSHROOOM AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
AND GOD THE LAST LINE DID YOU DO THAT ON PURPOSE TO KILLL MEEEE NAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
That was...... That was..... AWWWWWWWWWWWWWW I LOVE THAT STORYYYYY.
From the characters,....... Val so sweety silly cutie cinnamon roll with her antics I was so happy to witness chapter after chapter.... Gifted with a sad backstory which only makes her more adorable, strong despite her innocence, and deserving all the possible love in this world. And Cael who is reliable, kindhearted and suffering from a heavy past....... Their dynamics were just purrfect. I loved to see them interact, I loved to see Val torture him!
To the narration,.... So beautifully written. Pwetty. And you manage almost from the beginning - if not from - not to have any sort of boring moment 'cause you wonderfully take advantage of Val-Cael interactions to fill things like walking/simple actions; idk if I'm being clear but well. Your descriptions are often delightful, I especially liked the one of the misty forest. You write in a cosy, softy way. MWAH.
To the world-building,... With all the Vanishing thing. Decidedly the Vanishing was what you less focused on but we learnt why the world became empty so okay. The ready-to-use machine was maybe what less convinced me because yess there's an explication... Still it's a bit easy. But okay you did a too fabulous novel for me to complain too much :3
Also nice ending, we see how things change slowly and this match the peaceful pace of the story. 'Glad that Val retrieved someone dear to her heart.
I have no particular other criticism, unless maybe what I already pointed out in comments when at some point Cael understands words there's no reasonable way Val would know, and too bad that after some point you don't write words one of them doesn't understand according to the format you used for each one's language.
Aside from that, I claim once more I fell in love with your story. 'You better tell me once it is in library, I want a autographed book on my shelf 
And now win that contest!! ~°.★
