Mar 18, 2023
Hmm. Well as long as that's designed to be a short story I am not sure of the way I may judge it.
I guess as an exercise of narration it's ok. For quite young readers it may also be ok I suppose.
But well, maybe you can scold me for reading too many stories, but nothing really surprised me. I mean, one time I got ill-at-ease when the black panther suddenly stopped making any sound while Golden Star was climbing inside the tree trunk. My curiosity got satisfied when I learnt what the threat was. However, that apart everything was rather guessable, while it's often said short stories are fantastic when the ending leaves you on the ass.
Plus, the naive child does nothing more than running away, the mother beats the threat rather easily. Hmm