Aug 27, 2022

Well, I enjoyed this story a lot! :)
I love your writing style. I read about half of this story in one sitting, and I never got tired or bored.
I really think you're very talented, and I feel lucky I got the chance to read something entirely original from you.

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Aug 25, 2022

Jesus, Sabrina, chill 😦

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Aug 20, 2022

I loved how you changed to third person with Sophie's POV, and how the narration matches her character perfectly. She's adorable.

Also, I'm DELIGHTED with the excellent moving picture she got to watch! ^^
And how she would go rescue her girl classmate made me smile, but I think that's me making connections that might not even be there ☺️

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Aug 20, 2022

Sophie's so cute! I find her dialogue really fun 😊

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Aug 20, 2022

I giant bug is definitely NOT what I was expecting. Poor kid.

I loved Clark's solid logic. Reminded me of blaming any weird night sounds to the cats ^^, very relatable.

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Aug 20, 2022

I was waiting for this story to be finished before starting it because I knew I would get hooked right of the bat. And I am! I know I'm going to binge this, and I regret nothing.

I really like how you presented the characters and the setting. Your writing style paints such a clear picture it is a pleasure to read, and I believe you really mastered the "show, don't tell" technique.

It's a really good start, and I'm sure I'm going to love the rest of it.

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