Oct 11, 2022
To:Liber Mercury
Thank you very much for checking my story my friend! About the inner dialog, you are correct about it and in fact for future chapters I did it. When I started writing it, I didn't think about using italic for inner thoughts, and I've fixed the other chapters. Seems like I missed that one. Thank you for mentioning it out! For the change in perspective, I understand the feedback and I see it might be confusing to be thrown to 4 different scenes in one chapter, I don't do it much later on. This is kind of a small montage/overview of different parts of the story, we are going in depth from chapter 2 :) I'll take it into consideration, to see how I can improve chapter 1 to be easier to read and understand. As for Riff question, as much as I want to answer you, I prefer to let the story reveal the answers :) I really appreciate your comment, kind words and time my friend. Thank you very much!