Jul 18, 2024

Bear basically telling Kit to stop running off to pick a fight at every opportunity was a good scene, it showed how naive and inexperienced Kit is.

That being said, I think the metaphor falls apart a little. I know “metal can’t cut stone” is supposed to be a figure of speech, but we’ve cutting stone with metal for as long as we’ve been using metal tools

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Jul 18, 2024

Big chapter tomorrow. Been waiting a whole week to publish it

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Jul 17, 2024

Well that was horrifying. I feel like I need a shower and a therapy session.

Jokes aside, in the gap between the first set of chapters and the last I kept checking every now and then to make sure I hadn’t missed anything new, this story kept me on the edge of my seat pretty much from minute one. And honestly I think you stuck the landing pretty hard.

The whole theme about people being consumed by past trauma, and especially Ruri’s point about how she could easily have become what Keisuke is, was done especially well. The tens of thousands of loops of the same awful events are a really good depiction of what long-term traumatic stress can be like for someone, especially in the aspect of a person blaming themselves for something they could never have possibly prevented.

I did feel like there were certain points that lost me, though. Especially the parts with Kai and the pseudo-astrophysics-y explanation of everything. I think this is more me nitpicking as a physicist than critiquing as a reader, but a lot of that section felt like a case of “throw in some science words and hope they buy it,” where honestly I’d have preferred no explanation at all.

TLDR: I love Bohemian Rhapsody

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Jul 17, 2024

Only 二? Amateurs. My blood leaves stains that look like 二九八

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Jul 17, 2024

Also congrats on 1k views

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Jul 17, 2024

I'm not so sure you'd be able to punch a hole through an apartment wall in Japan. It's not the US, I don't think they use weak materials like drywall. If it's anything like here in Europe, you'll break your hand looooong before you break a wall

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Jul 17, 2024

To:Lihinel

Tournament arcs my beloved (this arc won’t last long, it’s just set up)

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Jul 17, 2024

To:Lihinel

Tournament arcs my beloved (this arc won’t last long, it’s just set up)

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Jul 17, 2024

To:mykaDehr

Lol, that was one of my favourite lines when I was writing.

I’m glad you’re finding it engaging, thanks for the feedback

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Jul 16, 2024

I think you might have copy-pasted the first sentence wrong, there's an unnatural jump

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Jul 16, 2024

I left my computer for all of two minutes to get a drink and came back to 11 notifications

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Jul 16, 2024

All four members of the main cast have now met up with their Flame equivalent. Has the seed of doubt been sown?

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Jul 16, 2024

Ayo, fuck Kana. Bitch deserved to get smacked up.

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Jul 16, 2024

>When I don’t respond, he takes it as consent.
Damn, what a charmer. As if this dude couldn’t get any rapier

Btw, last chapter still calls her “Kai” while this one calls her “Mashiro”

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Jul 15, 2024

"Why am I imagining me and Arata together?"
Take a wild guess, genius.

Is this gonna be some Indian Soap Opera style plot twist where the girl he was dating was Arata but she's changed so much he doesn't even remember her?

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