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Albert Dupin

"The warrior who acts out of honour cannot fail. [...] Seek honour as you act, therefore, and you will know no fear." -Roboute Guilliman-
I'm in love with the arts, especially literature and cinema.
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registered at: Jun 06, 2023

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Mar 12, 2024

Thank you for being my test subject Per, I owe you a reading. PD: greetings from Jane too

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The Governor's Queen

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Aug 17, 2023

I'm sorry, I've taken a little while to be able to read... between finishing my story and work, I haven't had much time. I've given it a quick first glance, I like the style, but I'd like to read it more carefully (as soon as I can) and give you a more detailed comment. I have the story added to my library 😊

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With a Love Sorceress I'll Make My Romance Last!

Chapter:1

Aug 03, 2023

To:Eiko

Thank you! The LN is already finished, I just have to post the last chapters. I will be commissioning more character art. 😊

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I want to recover my normal Student Life! Vol. 1

Chapter:1

Aug 03, 2023

To:Hina

thank you!😊

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I want to recover my normal Student Life! Vol. 1

Chapter:1

Jul 13, 2023

To:minatika

It's a little bit complicated xD.

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Chapter:4

Jul 13, 2023

To:minatika

Yes, she's fine. Don't worry, she's just a little over-excited and she's ended up harming herself. But she has a high pain threshold, so she doesn't give it much thought.

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I want to recover my normal Student Life! Vol. 1

Chapter:3

Jul 11, 2023

To:minatika

What or who will Ai be? Who knows? 🤔😁

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I want to recover my normal Student Life! Vol. 1

Chapter:2

Jul 10, 2023

To:minatika

Thank you! I will try to make it the best possible for the contest. Good Luck.

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I want to recover my normal Student Life! Vol. 1

Chapter:1

Jun 10, 2023

Based on how it was before, from Chapter 1 to Chapter 5 is the first chapter; from Chapter 6 to Chapter 8, it’s actually the second chapter; 9, 10, and part of 11 form the third chapter; the fourth chapter is scattered between 11 and 13; the fifth chapter starts in 12 and ends in 14; from 15 to 17 are the sixth chapter.

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I want to recover my normal Student Life! Vol. 1

Chapter:1

Jun 09, 2023

I'm sorry, it's not a new chapter (it's part of chapter 2). I had to split them due to the rule that for the contest, they have to be between 1000 and 1500 words. I appreciate your understanding. In theory, I planned to have 12 chapters, but with the subdivisions, I'm not sure how many they will end up being.

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Chapter:6

Jun 09, 2023

This is what would theoretically be the end of chapter 6. I had to split them because I read that one of the rules (on Discord) was to have chapters between 1000 and 1500 words, and the first one alone exceeded 6000. I'm sorry, no one mentioned anything in the comments either...

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Chapter:17

Jun 08, 2023

To:Albert Dupin

I'm sorry I misread and there is indeed a space, but the comma should be a period, or rather, the 'T' should be lowercase."

Crystal Sky

Chapter:0

Jun 08, 2023

“Apologies for the intrusion, I haven’t read the chapter yet, I’ve only glanced at it initially... There is an error in the punctuation at the end: ‘-‘. He cleared his throat before continuing, ‘The world is not what we make of it, rather it’s the world, and everyone around us, who make who we are.’ Before continuing, ‘the...’ The ‘T’ should be lowercase, or the comma should be a period, and there should be a space between the dialogue and the punctuation mark. Once I read the chapter more thoroughly. I’ll try to provide some constructive feedback (I’ve already noticed a couple of things that can be improved in terms of the writing, but I want to analyse it further).”

Crystal Sky

Chapter:0

Jun 08, 2023

Well, I’ve finished the prologue. The story concept seems good, it doesn’t take long to read. But if you allow me a friendly critique, there are some things in the narration that could be improved... for example, “The only thought is a vague one,” you could remove the “one” because it’s redundant and the sentence wouldn’t change... or the part of the paragraph “I walk all the way to the back, sitting down and pulling out a few paperbacks. I know for a fact this is about to be a long trip. I deserve it, though. After all, I am nothing more than a mother killing monster.” Is repetitive because you start three sentences with “I”... by changing it slightly, you could enhance the flow. There are a couple of things you could review to improve readability. (removing words that don’t alter the meaning of the sentences; removing a few weak adverbs…). Good luck and keep up the effort :)

PS: I’m sorry if I haven’t expressed myself clearly, English is not my native language.

My Grandma's Loving Maid Is My Classroom Neighbor?!

Chapter:0

Jun 07, 2023

I want to see how you approach the battles. Mine don’t quite convince me. They are functional, but I feel like they’re missing something... maybe a bit of spectacle.

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Neo Akihabara Meipouchou

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