Nov 16, 2023
To:Jon Spencer
Thank you for your comment! I'm not going to lie, it was a bit of a struggle and I did end up changing a few things throughout the process. I'll have to do better at ensuring everything is edited properly for the next time. The initial phrase was changed quite a few times so that's on me.
I will make sure the next time I post a story here (which will probably be some time after NaNoWriMo) that my punctuation is proper. I also see what you mean with the atmosphere, I definitely could have done something better to show that time felt inconsistent. I will also do better on the pacing, as it's not the first time someone told me the pacing was a bit off.
Once again, thank you for your comments and encouragement!