Jan 25, 2025

Strong start. You're good at describing scenery, and your dialogue for characters like Livy is good. The ending could be better and maybe explain more about the world. Who is the queen of time? Who are spell casters? The invasion feels sudden, and you could build up some tension besides that nice work.

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Jan 25, 2025

"Brothers" is a title that holds more weight than it may initially appear. While this chapter introduces the legendary figures of Remedias and Migama as heroes bound by brotherhood, their story is far from simple. Sometimes, even the brightest light casts the darkest shadow, and the truth of their story will shape the fate of this world.

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Jan 12, 2025

congrats on finally completing ur novel! 🙌👏

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Jan 12, 2025

To:Maverick

Sure. whats ur dc?

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Jan 07, 2025

This chapter establishes Renjiro’s grounded life, his struggles at the forge, and his longing for more. This update focuses on his relationship with Satoshi, the village dynamics, and his internal conflict, setting a strong thematic foundation for his journey.

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Jan 03, 2025

this is actually decent. how did chrono energy come to be where did it come from?

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Jan 03, 2025

nice chapter I like the flow and pacing and the chrono energy how did it come to be?

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Jan 03, 2025

nice chapter and loving the cover!

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Jan 02, 2025

Wow, that was something... the way you described the zombie attack I felt it i was there. so many scenes and so many questions I can't wait to read the next chapters nice work.

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Jan 02, 2025

nice ending well done on completing the story. you truly made an engaging narrative

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Dec 09, 2024

like the choice of the empire in space. It’s unique and I love it

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Dec 09, 2024

Yh I deleted a chapter by accident and re-uploaded 😅

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Dec 05, 2024

👍

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Dec 02, 2024

bro
your writing style is so good!

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Dec 02, 2024

Thanks for the feedback! Much appreciated.

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