Jan 12, 2025
Hello!
I really thought this was a strong first chapter. It introduced us to our main character; Zipper, and how she sees the world. Which is from a lens of someone who is just enjoying their youth.
I also enjoyed your world building this chapter. Everything with the trends of the clothes being so detailed and the fact that Zipper is just a hair out of touch. Is just a great example of making a character relatable and quirky.
Oh and please read my novel “Wage Hand”. I’m a new author and wanted to try my hand at writing. So please give it a read and tell me what you think!
