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Jan 22, 2018
Why am I relating so hard...
Nov 23, 2016
Awesome chapter! Cant wait for the next!
Nov 13, 2016
This was really cute. The beginning sounded a little not-story-like, more like a scientific paper. Maybe try to weave the setting and character development in more with the plot. I enjoyed reading this, though!
Nov 12, 2016
Really well written. The plot seems really similar to the Transformers series, but I enjoyed the focus on one AI.
Awesome job! I really enjoyed it. I've seen this plotline done before, but I really liked the character development and the pace of the story. Just one thing, the ending seemed kind of abrupt; even though I know you want it to be a happy end, it seemed like really soon and convenient for the rapist to apologize to wrap up the plot. Overall, though, nice work!
I like the character development (how the characters had realistic majors and relatable personalities). Risa's personality seemed a little sudden, however, and the gang didn't have a lot of description (like an underlying thread throughout the story enough). Still, I thought it was a good short read and refreshing with the inclusion of technology with common storylines.
