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Steampocalypse

Also Steampocalypse on Tapas, Ao3, and Anilist.
A reader who's a fan of idols, BL, and shoujo. A writer for a long time who's writing webnovels for the first time. He/him, young adult.
All fanfictions and other non-commercial works based off of my fiction are OK, including any subject matter. No plagiarism (passing work off as your own) and I would prefer if those works be posted on a site intended for fanworks rather than Honeyfeed directly (with the exception of gallery-appropriate fanart).

registered at: Jun 30, 2025

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Aug 15, 2025

I have many questions. So does Nell. Perfect.
Big fan of the interplay with the mirror

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An Original Sin

Chapter:1

Aug 15, 2025

Now this is a good prologue, a short excerpt that sets up the mood + intrigue and feels prologuey without being opaque + long

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An Original Sin

Chapter:0

Aug 15, 2025

John (getting a BLOWTORCH and RAW PORK): I'm gonna do something genius
me: I don't think you are

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You Only Kiss Twice - SPY LitRPG

Chapter:40

Aug 14, 2025

The spell being disturbed by emotions is interesting

Fear the Night

Fear the Night

Chapter:5

Aug 14, 2025

I still love your prose. It made this scene so cool.
I wanna see Aya interact more with the world and other characters

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Failure Will Make My Pen Sharp as a Blade: My Writer's Life in Another World

Chapter:4

Aug 14, 2025

This whole thing is so thematically consistent and has so much good anticipation and tension

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Failure Will Make My Pen Sharp as a Blade: My Writer's Life in Another World

Chapter:3

Aug 14, 2025

I love that it smells of old paper and the buildings are leaking ink. Such a sick aesthetic

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Failure Will Make My Pen Sharp as a Blade: My Writer's Life in Another World

Chapter:2

Aug 14, 2025

All the shade on her this chapter is so funny, poor woman

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Failure Will Make My Pen Sharp as a Blade: My Writer's Life in Another World

Chapter:1

Aug 14, 2025

I love your writing style, the flow of easing us in and how both the narration and the dialogue just work so well without being excessively showy

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Failure Will Make My Pen Sharp as a Blade: My Writer's Life in Another World

Chapter:0

Aug 14, 2025

Thanks to Ramen-sensei for liking every chapter :)

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Literary Tense

Chapter:17

Aug 11, 2025

Tis concrit you asked for, and concrit you shall receive.
-> The cold had never felt so close against the backdrop of the solar wind
You're using a negative when I think you mean a positive—that the cold IS close. It makes the sentence somewhat confusing to parse. UPDATE: Seems you meant that it is in fact not cold. In general, I would just clean up this sentence, maybe replace it with your later full paragraph about the wind.
-> the regular spacecraft
Is there one, or many? You might mean the regular spacecrafts.
I would leave the near of near-Earth orbit lowercased as that's the correct grammar, but that could also be a facet of your worldbuilding or style you want to leave be.
I wonder why he's so zoned out in a dangerous situation. I guess he's expecting everything to be calculated right? But what are you even doing out there, Major.
I do love the dreamy feeling. The paragraph of "suddenly, he was a child again" is really good. I love the cadence of the prose and the way it portrays the theme of the chapter.
-> A roar filled his ears, and the roar blinded him
Restating the subject within the same sentence is a bit awkward, use a pronoun. I was initially dubious of this roar with visual effects, but that seems to be very much what you intend—for it to sort of have this uncanniness because it's both auditory and visual? Still reads odd, but you may be cooking.
-> he winced -> He winced
The end of the story is so cool: the last couple lines really hit, and I love some good sci fi. Just realized this is a short story, not a first chapter. To make a more cohesive and compelling standalone work, I think you could make the theme of the character losing & then regaining his wonder stronger and more central to the story.

Solar Wind

Chapter:1

Aug 11, 2025

I love your prose. It has such a good, beautiful flow.
Give it a proofread, though. The underlying writing is really good but there were errors and typos (like did you mean it to change to Vietnamese, and also periods should have a space after them) that unfortunately took me out. That said your style is awesome

My First Abandoned Novel, A Bet Between the Goddess and the Author for a Satisfying Ending!

Chapter:0

Aug 11, 2025

The way you use the power system here is super fun and cool, making your main guy have really low stats but a really powerful skill, and to boot the skill only works on one person, who he already has a complicated relationship with… 👏👏👏

Kill Me Hero

Chapter:3

Aug 11, 2025

An empire’s heir, that’s pretty intense (though seems mostly like delusions of grandeur)
I really like the banter this chapter

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You Only Kiss Twice - SPY LitRPG

Chapter:39

Aug 11, 2025

This is such a nice to read, nicely paced and cleanly written story.

Taking Healing To Higher Levels

Taking Healing To Higher Levels In Another World

Chapter:6