Jul 13, 2025
Hey! This looks like a really promising premise. I'm not sure where it's going to go, but there is a lot of potential here. However, I don't want to be preachy but the English needs some work. There are a lot of grammar errors, punctuation errors and inconsistent styling. This makes it a little difficult to read and affects my enjoyment as a reader. Hope this helps, and I hope you keep at it :D
