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Aug 01, 2025
Great initial hook! Interested to learn what transpires next.
Might seem like a strange comment, but I like how you format the lines that are his thoughts. I've seen italics used before, but the -- at the beginning really helps my brain catch that it's an internal piece of dialogue. Great story thus far!
"Wet Soggy Tofu" will live rent-free in my head next time I'm on a train. The way you describe his thoughts is on-point and resonates - which might say something about me LOL. Keep up the great work!
Jul 31, 2025
To:McMolly
Glad to hear you're enjoying it! And I'm very excited to release the next few chapters as the narrative starts to get off of the ground.
