Feb 04, 2026
To:mindokusai
Me: man I sure do wish someone would give me some feedback
My brain when someone offers to give me feedback: 🤪
In all seriousness thank you so much for offering. Just telling me that sometimes it's hard to keep track it POV changes helps. I've been debating adding the charcater names at the start of the POV changes like in Game of Thrones/ASoIaF but I didn't wanna seem like a lame try hard TvT which I am. I know I throw a lot of characters and jump POVs and it can be jarring. If you happen to read along and see any like spelling errors or missing commas and stuff feel free to point that out although that should be my job TvT my eyes get so tired. Mainly though I just want to know if at least some of the characters click? Not like on an resonate with you kind of way, I try not to preach and it that happens on accident that's awesome but mostly if you at least care for a few of them? Lol. It seems silly to ask idk. It would help a lot for when I post my next story to know what works and what doesn't. I tried approaching this with the usual zombie story issues out of the way, like a overly complicated survival plot, too many characters introduced aside from the main cast, less focus on the main cast, etc. Really shooting for good pacing that feels relentless. Also I ranted sorry TvT. I'm on mobile at work hard to organize my thoughts and seem cool and professional.
