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New writer, just seeing how it goes.

registered at: Jan 04, 2026

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Jun 10, 2026

I can tell you're passionate about this, and that's why I'm commenting. You need to utilize " show, don't tell" more. If this is light novel-inspired, like how I write, then it's ok, but you need to weave a bit of " show, don't tell in there as well.

For example: when Vale is what I presume to be talking to Ren about the eagle, rather than telling us he has an eagle, you could show it by describing the claws the character sees or the beak. It helps the reader envision it more.

Also, please learn how to use quotation marks when people are talking. It's very hard to follow.

Example: He looked at Ren and said, "You have the black manda, the ancient being who stood at the top of the power system, equal to the dragon kings."

Also, please learn how to format the text properly. It's hard to follow because it's a wall of text.

Last thing is that you really need to learn grammar; having no punctuation will seriously hurt you as a writer. It is mandatory.

Apart from that, I think you're good. Just keep at it, and you will improve. :)

I was chosen to destroy the world but I chose peace instead

Chapter:1

Apr 19, 2026

This sorta reminded me of the start to 100 girlfriends. Fun read!

The Neko Wish: god Turned One Girl Into a Neko Kanojo and Now I Have to Find Her!

Chapter:1

Apr 19, 2026

To:lN_Subaru

Is that master I see? 😂

The Neko Wish: god Turned One Girl Into a Neko Kanojo and Now I Have to Find Her!

Chapter:4

Apr 19, 2026

To:lN_Subaru

thanks! It means a lot. I can't wait to see arc 6 animated in season 4 lol the first 2 eps have been insane.

The tsundere in my class secretly loves me!

Chapter:5

Apr 19, 2026

You accidentally published chapter 4 instead of chapter 1. Just letting you know, as this seems interesting! can't wait to start!

The Neko Wish: god Turned One Girl Into a Neko Kanojo and Now I Have to Find Her!

Chapter:4

Apr 12, 2026

Good start! excited to see where it goes next.

My roomate is a 2D girl

Chapter:1

Mar 28, 2026

Hi, I thought I'd make a little author note for this one.

First of all, to the people who are reading my story, thank you! Honestly, it is a true honour to be writing this story, and I'm glad you have stuck with it thus far.

Now, about the release schedule. I know it's bad, and I apologize for that. College assignments and all that. Since I have a couple of weeks off, I hope to write more frequently(maybe), so I look forward to that. After the break, I hope to upload around 3 chapters a week. (Monday, Thursday, Sunday).

Now, will Reina tell Rin the truth? Find out in the next chapter!

The tsundere in my class secretly loves me!

Chapter:12

Mar 15, 2026

i just found time to read this after having it in my library for a while, and it's great! This story already has my vote to win the contest for sure.

My Romantic Comedy in the Heartbreak Society Is More Complicated Than I Expected — Especially Around Her

Chapter:1

Feb 24, 2026

A story inspired by oregairu? now this is peak

My Romantic Comedy in the Heartbreak Society Is More Complicated Than I Expected — Especially Around Her

Chapter:0

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