Jul 11, 2021
Hi! I really liked the first episode, and I feel that the premise, characters, and themes that you set up are really good! The only thing I feel you could improve on is give it one final round of editing to polish some edges. For example, when they are announcing the rules of the competition, the spokesman is says that "...But everything you do has to be made here. And you can't use something you've made before. You can't enter a game you've finished, and you can't use art or music you've made before..." If this was a choice regarding the personality of the character, then I'm sorry for pointing it out, but I feel that the character is reiterating the first sentence again and again but in other words. Nevertheless, I'm really digging the story and I can't wait for the next chapter!!
