Jul 25, 2021
I am really enjoying this - especially the descriptions!
Just one thing (personal preference I think) - I've found that for me when I'm reading a book or webnovel, seeing constant 'I said', 'exclaimed', or 'asked' distracts me a little.
I prefer it when it is paired with action. I'm not great at writing myself but an example would be:
instead of:
"'Where's my pencil?!' he bellowed.", I would prefer
"'Where's my pencil?!' He slammed his hands down on the table, the noise echoing throughout the classroom." or something. idk how to make examples. I've been reading the secret history and donna tartt does this and i like it.
anyway i love your descriptions and writing, i will keep up with this for sure!