Sep 15, 2022
To:Tomoyuki
Hello! Tomoyuki! First of all, I would like to thank you for taking the time to read and, more importantly, to provide valuable feedback on how my writing is lacking the necessary format / descriptions that one should consider when trying to convey a story through this medium. I honestly appreciate it.
I will revise the chapters internally and improve upon how I am delivering them. As you mention, reading others’ works is the best way to internalize the critique and understand how to bes move forward.
I read all three of your comments and hope that, at the very very least, the story is somewhat to your liking, regardless of it’s clear faults I’m format. Regardless, whether or not you continue reading, I will gladly built upon the feedback to make sure the readers become more immersed, as I truly believe the story I want to tell is worth the shot.
Let me know any negative or positive opinion whenever you want, and more so if you continue reading on!😀👍