Aug 06, 2021
To:JayDKidd
Thank you for the feedback! It's true that I want it to be quite chaotic, and I do suppose this Prologue is quite fast-paced. I've been told by some others that it also seems a bit bland because of how fast it is, so I do want to get back to it at some time in the future to flesh it out a bit more. As for the dialogue, I promise it gets better in future chapters! I deliberately chose to make the parents' dialogue here ambiguous because it could really go either way, but I will rectify that so it's easier to read for others.
Thank you so much for taking some time out of your day to read my story, and I'll try to return the favour (whenever I'm done writing for the day)! Also, the beginning of the story is, funnily enough, based on a true story in my family, so it's something I like to laugh at, and I thought it would fit this character!