I'm a high schooler in the US that's just here to share some stuff I write for fun.
Feel free to check out my stuff. Feedback is really appreciated!
Aug 24, 2021
Let me say some things first:
I didn't like Elaina.
Any Shakespeare will go way my head.
And slice of life is not my cup of tea.
All that said...
The dialogue is natural. It flows well and it never feels forced. The main character's motivations and his reactions also feel real. You've definitely accomplished your goal of making him super relatable.
Overall, it's not anything fancy(which is perfectly fine). But dang! This is good writing.