Nov 06, 2023
To:Bubbles
At first, I just want to say that I am taking all the criticism into consideration for my eventual future work.
With the whole journey to the house, I have yet to learn how to properly skip through certain scenes so they won't feel dragged or unnecessary.
I don't exactly understand what you mean by "describing in a thematically apoproriate way", I have my guesses, but it still confuses me.
About the teenagery perversion It may be my experiences and years of watching anime that make me feel like it is something natural in a sense? It's hard to explain. Just being in high school and people talking about perverse things was kind of the norm; same with the anime I have watched and the manga I've read, which had those perverse elements even when the story was about middle schoolers (in this case for me it was a tiny bit weird but when I thought about how boys and girls acted during my middle school years, I somehow accepted that). Of course, it is not to everyone's taste. If I had written a more serious story, maybe then I wouldn't have put this bit out there, but I didn't see and still don't see anything wrong with it personally.
