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Apr 17, 2023

I loved the visual of him running out of the apartment. It evoked the classic running with toast in your mouth made famous in the Sailor Moon series. You keep writing. But, think about your end game, where you want this to go and how is the protagonist going to get there. I do like what I'm seeing but you might want to be a little clearer.

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:21

Sep 27, 2022

I think this is the best chapter you have written so far. You made me cry a little bit. The entire thing had a cathartic element to it. He did an amazing job.—- reading while hiding from a hurricane—- again you’ve grown as a writer in this chapter.

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:20

Sep 27, 2022

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:20

Aug 01, 2022

I like this chapter. You don't always see the mental games we play with ourself when something traumatic happens.. and losing a fight is traumatic for him. I also think you can mention the humidity. My friends in Japan say the humidity in August is the worst. You keep putting up these chapters and I'll keep reading. Also, love the "everything she does or doesn't do is deliberate" part. She seems like that kind of person who does everything with purpose.

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:19

Jun 09, 2022

To:Albion K. D. Kuki

Yes I am. I hope to start another season soon. The day job became to much to handle and do the podcast . Thanks for listening.

The Awakening

Chapter:1

Jun 09, 2022

You write modern teenagers better than I ever can. I liked the frenzied urgancy when they get to the train station. The events at eh beach were good too and not overly tropey. I look forward to the next installment.

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:17

Mar 02, 2022

You did a good job this was a nice slice of life moment and you ticked almost all the swimsuit buying boxes. I enjoyed this chapter and look forward to the new ones. Also, writing all those conversations can be hard.

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:16

Nov 12, 2021

I like this update. I like this more domestic side. I would prefer a little more over flirting. But, that’s the shojo fan and me.

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:15

Sep 12, 2021

You made me think of my cat. She used to hide under the sink during thunderstorms... ironically her name was Storm. I like how things are slowly heating up...

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:13

Sep 05, 2021

You did an excellent job on the imagery. I can see the group of boys sitting down with their emptied bags of chips and Coke on the concrete next to them. I do like you also paid attention to the Westminster bell chime is the standard time for Japanese schools. I also like the introduction of the Gyaru character. It would make sense that he had a friend like that in his past. i’m also liking that even though the group of guys isn’t exactly what you would call “the best people“ that she is becoming a custom to them and enjoying the atmosphere… Just a little bit.

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:12

Sep 05, 2021

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:12

Aug 27, 2021

I wonder "when" you have time to write every day? ; )

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:11

Jul 21, 2021

I’m sitting at a cafe across from a beach in Greece and telling the person next to me how good the writing is especially in the first several paragraphs. You keep up the good work.

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:8

Jul 12, 2021

Keep Going. Keep Posting.

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:7

Jul 01, 2021

Keep going I'm curious as to where this is going.

Head Games with Hyouka

Chapter:6

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