Sep 16, 2021
I'll be honest, I only clicked on your novel because the cover looked well-made. But, I wasn't too disappointed by the writing either! I think it's a bit strange that you use honorifics (unless you are fluent in Japanese - if so, my bad), and actually *writing* your onomatopoeia is also very very strange... borders on cringe, really. You also don't need to say things like 'in medias res' - your story and writing should tell that for you! I do like the premise, and the hook leading into the next chapter though, and your work seems well-edited. Good job, I will add this to my list to read more of later...
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