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Hungry Sheep

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I wanna get isekaid.

registered at: Jun 06, 2022

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Jul 17, 2022

To:dmznot

Ichika is Izanami, yes!

My First and Last Kiss Was With You

Chapter:6

Jul 17, 2022

To:dmznot

Nakano Ichika is her full name! I chose to write their names the way they'd normally be done in Japanese (last name first), but it might be a little confusing, yeah.

My First and Last Kiss Was With You

Chapter:7

Jul 16, 2022

the word "boobs" doesn't appear in this chapter what a shame

Gifted Education Project (GEP)

Chapter:14

Jul 16, 2022

To:Deleted User

Thank you! This is actually something that exists in real life! It's called Littlewood's Law!

My First and Last Kiss Was With You

Chapter:10

Jul 12, 2022

Cupid's BLAME! makes me want to delete my contest entry so I can be a judge for this category.

Cupid's BLAME!

Chapter:6

Jul 12, 2022

I think the chapter length needs to be a little longer. 1000 words is a good baseline to aim for and then you can go from there.

There are a few formatting and grammatical nitpicks, but the flow of the story is fine. One error that stood out was in the penultimate line:

"Rowen rested her head against Gallants' chest and closed her eyes listening to the beat of his heart through his armor."

I'm sure that's just a typo, but as it currently stands, "Gallants'" would imply that Rowen is resting her head upon multiple Gallants.

Never Follow A Cat Into Another World

Chapter:2

Jul 12, 2022

Good.

However, the first word after a semicolon doesn't need to be capitalized as a semicolon is not a period!

Never Follow A Cat Into Another World

Chapter:1

Jul 12, 2022

To:Deleted User

She needs to get stronger than the archbishop!

I Am the Greatest

Chapter:41

Jul 11, 2022

To:Saito Forester

Yes! I'm just having trouble thinking of how to progress the story ;-;

My First and Last Kiss Was With You

Chapter:9

Jul 11, 2022

To:Deleted User

Liandra's been indoctrinated her whole life though, so her behavior was supposed to be indicative of that XD

I Am the Greatest

Chapter:40

Jul 10, 2022

To:miklosabdul

Yeah! Ryuuko is the main character, but she's not the only character. I feel like a lot of novels in this genre tend to forget that.

I Am the Greatest

Chapter:29

Jul 09, 2022

To:miklosabdul

A little more binding than that, but yeah!

I Am the Greatest

Chapter:23

Jul 09, 2022

To:miklosabdul

Yep...

I Am the Greatest

Chapter:18

Jul 09, 2022

To:miklosabdul

She's her own worst enemy.

I Am the Greatest

Chapter:13

Jul 09, 2022

To:Deleted User

She might be, she might not be! The next chapter will hold the answers!

I Am the Greatest

Chapter:38