Jul 12, 2022
I think the chapter length needs to be a little longer. 1000 words is a good baseline to aim for and then you can go from there.
There are a few formatting and grammatical nitpicks, but the flow of the story is fine. One error that stood out was in the penultimate line:
"Rowen rested her head against Gallants' chest and closed her eyes listening to the beat of his heart through his armor."
I'm sure that's just a typo, but as it currently stands, "Gallants'" would imply that Rowen is resting her head upon multiple Gallants.