Jul 02, 2022
Certainly a dynamic opening for our fourth main girl here. Her first PoV also being a fight sequence definitely is a dynamic choice, and gives us a surprising amount of insight into her character just through how she goes about it. I also agree with the earlier comment that an "ignoble noble" definitely has some cool foil potential with prim and proper characters in the main group like Endra, and our glorious country bumpkin green bean of a heroine.
I will say, some of the movements in the fight ended up a little hard to follow due to the way the description is drawn out. There's a lot of "as X happened, and as Y happened, then Z also happened" which sort of creates a feeling of seeing things in slow-motion, if that makes any sense. I think some shorter, choppier sentences might convey the speed of the action a lot better.
Still, quite enjoyable, and looking forward to seeing where Rel goes from here!