Jul 09, 2022
To:Deleted User
Hey, first of all - Thanks for the critique. Really. I've read your comments on the other chapters. At first I thought the dash and italics is a great way to distinguish myself, but now I realize that I should just stick to quotation marks. I've had another person to read the 1st chapter and they said that the dialogue feels natural. Maybe in some places I had to make it more literary, but mostly I try to make it feel natural.
In the critique of the first chapter, you wrote about the "punch"? What do you mean by that?
He's an edgelord, but just like every other edgy teen, he'll eventually outgrow it. AKA character development.
Sorry I had to write everything in just one place, but I feel that it's better than replying to the other comments. Thanks again for your time.
