Aug 24, 2023
Ryba, you gotta find to make such conversations a bit more interesting - after 20 chapters, i notice that the characters dont do much while talking; You should make them a bit more active, it could be something small like looking at the sky, going down the stairs, even chewing gum, or like you did with the ending here. Just make them do a bit more than just delivering lines like in a soap opera.
