Jul 19, 2023
To:lolitroy
Hi! First off, I would like to say how thrilled I was to see someone commenting. Reading your review has definitely helped me a lot if not more, so thank you very much! I'll try my utmost best to improve.
I don't know much about the technicality of sentence structuring or much behind perspective changing so it makes sense that it came a bit off as monkeys on a typewriter. But I agree with what you've said.
While I was writing, I had a feeling that I was overdoing it on the actions. As for the punctuation, you're right, some were mistakenly placed. However, the writing was bound to appear strange as I structured it to be out of place. But even more so, you were right, the cloth is definitely over-soaked.
I truly appreciate you taking your time off to help me, and if you could, I'd love it if you could answer my questions.
Could you give me a concise example of inconsistency and parts that felt nonsensical? It would help me deliver a more engaging piece.
Thanks again and oh, I love your diamond analogy! Please feel free to have a read at the newest chapter, I'd love your outlook on that. 😊