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registered at: Nov 16, 2024

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Dec 22, 2024

Your writing is so cheeky. I love it

Sound Of The Future

Chapter:5

Dec 22, 2024

It is all great fun. I like where it is going!! although I have to say you should space out the sentences following "She hung up..." The average reader can get a little lost in there

Sound Of The Future

Chapter:2

Dec 22, 2024

The puns are killing me aaaaaaarg also if a student acted like that in real life that is an immediate suspension lololol

Sound Of The Future

Chapter:1

Dec 22, 2024

The Vibe Force is crazy hahaha I like the fact you are giving the lore not via exposition but framed it as a way to elicit banter from your characters. I can't get a read of your characters from this chapter alone so let's see how it goes in the next chapters. I will say, although I do like how candid your characters are in their internal monologue as well -- I think you should give it a second read through to see how it is paced out. One suggestion I might give is to separate sentences from the last paragraph a little bit out; there were a lot of sentences and full stops. It gives the reader more breathing room essentially.

Sound Of The Future

Chapter:0

Dec 19, 2024

hypalicious

The World Doesn't Change So Easily

Chapter:5

Dec 19, 2024

Lithium is still king?? Damn

Robot Catgirls Philosophizing on the Moon!

Chapter:18

Dec 18, 2024

NIIUUUUUU

Neko Nuke Nightmare

Chapter:12

Dec 18, 2024

Mmm this is so tasty om nom nom

A Scent of Seduction

Chapter:2

Dec 15, 2024

ARRRRGGGGG I LOVE DAVID BOWIE!!! ARRRRGHGGGGGG!! so the final chapter will be 'i cant give everything away' right

Robot Catgirls Philosophizing on the Moon!

Chapter:12

Dec 05, 2024

I LOVE THE DIALOGUE!!!!!! RAHHHHHHHHHHHHH

Robot Catgirls Philosophizing on the Moon!

Chapter:2

Nov 27, 2024

To:Steward McOy

I'm feeling the pressure too dw hahaha

Neko Nuke Nightmare

Chapter:6

Nov 26, 2024

Really hope this goes thru to the finalist stage. Writing is really good

Neko Nuke Nightmare

Chapter:6

Nov 26, 2024

Go Lena GOOOO!!

The Purpose Finding Program

Chapter:1

Nov 26, 2024

No, Rain... don't listen to the haters!!

Reverse of the Rain

Chapter:50

Nov 21, 2024

Your prose is improving chapter by chapter. So good!!

Reverse of the Rain

Chapter:46

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