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Cashew Cocoa

Just a writer for fun. I like my characters like onions, full of layers.
You can find my Discord account on the HF server. DMs are open if you want to chat.
All feedback is welcome, I promise I won't get offended.
Sending love and peace for everyone. Free hug included, and I wish you all the best.

registered at: Mar 05, 2025

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aaa

May 25, 2025

Bittersweet.
Sad, but with a positive outlook for the future.
Nice job, Haru.

One Last Message

Chapter:2

May 24, 2025

Baited us with the steamy title to make us eat up the whole Fred bit.
I didn't dislike it but... does it really have no point other than being a joke scene?

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Chapter:17

May 22, 2025

x6
These last two chapters were pretty good. Things are getting real interesting.

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Chapter:16

May 20, 2025

Demons get more savage with each generation. Their blood grows stronger and thicker…
So isn't the solution to dilute the blood of the next generation of demons? wink, wink

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Chapter:14

May 19, 2025

x5...
-"How much of a girlfailure do you want Reem to be?"
-Lolo: "Yes."

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Chapter:13

May 18, 2025

Pretty nice chapter. I didn't care about this group the first time they had a POV chapter, but this time it was different. The lore pieces we got were all pretty intriguing.

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Chapter:12

May 18, 2025

To:Moon

That's an interesting remark. My idea was that at this point Hoshina is still so out of touch with her feelings that she doesn't react the way most people would in such a situation. However, there is an argument that, even for her standards, this might be too much.
Either way, her reactions being so stiff was completely intentional.

The waste where silver gods lie

Chapter:6

May 17, 2025

He said the thing again... kinda. Unhinged counter x3
Also, "What if banana." Is going to be my new pickup line, thank you very much.

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Chapter:9

May 16, 2025

To:lolitroy

Nice, great, amazing, this is the kind of stuff that I need, thank you very much.
Yes, I agree completely on the flaws and I'm already working on improving upon them in future stories(whether I'm successful or not remains to be seen). At the end of the day, most of the flaws in this story were a result of one big story writing mistake: I was greedy and tried to cram in too much in a relatively short story, which is the reason for so much underdeveloped plots and characters, and even some of the core problems in the prose can be attributed to this(though most of the prose mistakes are still me being a novice at writing)
And I'm also very very happy about the praise on the good points of the story. You are the first person to comment on my "empathetic" portrayal of characters and their motivations. It is something that I'm very proud of, because I always try to make every single character have some real purpose behind their actions. Even Tina, one of the most "cartoonish" villains, had a background on how she became like that, and she genuinely thought she was in the right when condemning Hoshina. But once again, there was so much stuff to address I was unable to give her presence in more than 2 chapters.
In the end, I'm very glad that some people see real potential in this, because it means that once I address my amateurish mistakes, I can start creating really great stories… eventually... (I'll probably continue fumbling for a few more years, but meh, I'm still young)

The waste where silver gods lie

Chapter:40

May 14, 2025

"Are you unhinged?" counter: 2

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Chapter:7

May 13, 2025

To:lolitroy

Oh, yeah, now that I look at it after a while, I see how it can be confusing, crap.
So, ch29 was when Kaji and Hoshina reunited after spending a day back in each of their islands. Chs 30-33 was a bit of a flashback of how Hoshina spent that day. Then, from ch34 onwards we are back to the present, after Kaji and Hoshina met back following that first day in their respective islands.
Sorry for the confusion, I really didn't realize how disjointed some parts of my novel were until now. The more distant the novel becomes for me, the better I can see it's imperfections.

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Chapter:35

May 13, 2025

This chapter forced me to take out a google doc and write down the names, but other than that I didn't get lost(I think).
At least you waited until ch6 to rapid fire introduce 5+ names. I had around 9 names by ch3, so my sin is a bit heavier.

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Chapter:6

May 12, 2025

To:lolitroy

I won't deny it—I'm guilty, Your Honor.

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Chapter:26

May 12, 2025

To:lolitroy

I think I'll just lower my brain input and focus on enjoying the shenanigans instead of trying to find ways to analyze a story that doesn't really fall under the categories of writing that I'm used to.
I'll limit my comments to chill or funny remarks, and only go in deeper when something really stands out to me.

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Chapter:4

May 12, 2025

"Are you unhinged?" Sionn, I could ask you the same question for different reasons.
Also, Lolo, remember when I said that your style oozes personality? Now I'm starting to think it overflows with it, and it's a bit overwhelming for me. It's a style so different from what I know that the more I read the less confident I am about being able to give you some actual feedback, as it feels like my values might not apply very well here.
But what I can reiterate once again is the fact that it isn't boring, which is kind of a universal requirement for any decent story.

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Chapter:4