May 12, 2025
To:lolitroy
Thank you so much for reading! :)
Honestly, a lot of those questions I still have to figure out the answer to myself. I've been very much making it up as I go along. That's also why chapter 1 is so out of place, I was really going sentence by sentence trying to get down a scene I could build out from. I only started figuring out the tone I was going for and the details of the setting and what I wanted the overarching plot to be while writing the second chapter. In retrospect, the eating scene is very crass, and it's weird that Uatchita has such a muted response to it, if just stabbing someone makes her spiral the way it does. I'll probably rewrite it.
I feel like I'm underdelivering the world to the point it kind of makes things confusing, but I'm afraid of bloating the text with unnatural exposition. I feel like chapter 2 is already pushing it in that regard. If you have any tips regarding that stuff I'd gladly receive them!
Again, thank you very much for reading and for the insightful feedback!!
